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ishmael81
Number of posts : 3417 Age : 43 Localisation : St Louis Registration date : 2012-06-08
| Subject: Re: Taking the "poetic" out of songs Thu Jun 16, 2016 4:11 am | |
| I know I'm late to this conversation - somehow I missed it.
I think we need the poetic stuff sometimes. i know it can seem like puffery or silly, but the entire book of Psalms is poetry praising God, and a majority of Job and all of Song of Solomon is poetry. Heck, Saul got ticked off when the women sang David's acclaim in poetic language.
My point is yes, sometimes a song needs to just say what it needs to say. But sometimes we need the creative expression as well. | |
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alldatndensum Admin
Number of posts : 23657 Age : 55 Localisation : Tennessee Registration date : 2007-01-30
| Subject: Re: Taking the "poetic" out of songs Thu Jun 16, 2016 6:30 am | |
| I don't think that Jim or any of the rest of us really want to do away with all poetic expression. I think we need to do away with overly used tripe that are just tired.
It has been fun, though, thinking about ways to write a love song without those comparisons.
My next work: I Love You, But Don't Make Me Watch A Chick Flick
Anyone wish to get in on sculpting this masterpiece? _________________ I might have decided, or maybe not, that I should or shouldn't, depending on the issue or non-issue, to possibly share or not share, any thoughts, opinions, or facts (that might not be deemed factual by some), due to possible fear of any misinterpretation or retribution. https://christianhardmusic.niceboard.com/ | |
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ishmael81
Number of posts : 3417 Age : 43 Localisation : St Louis Registration date : 2012-06-08
| Subject: Re: Taking the "poetic" out of songs Thu Jun 16, 2016 8:22 am | |
| I hear ya. There's extremes to everything.
I do like the prospect of the new song:
Take more of the blanket while we're in bed I'll take care of you, when you have pain in your head Share my ice cream, here have a lick I love you so, but don't make me watch another chick flick | |
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Staybrite
Number of posts : 23668 Age : 56 Localisation : Arizona Desert Registration date : 2007-02-08
| Subject: Re: Taking the "poetic" out of songs Thu Jun 16, 2016 8:31 am | |
| Sitting on the couch, remote lies there between us. Thinking about a movie cuz I can't watch any reruns. Action or adventure, maybe a thriller flick sounds good. You know I love you baby but I don't think that I could...
Watch another chick flick Please don't make me girl Watch another chick flick Cuz it'll make me hurl.
(Okay, maybe that's a little over the top) _________________ "I used to be indecisive.......... Now I'm not sure."
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alldatndensum Admin
Number of posts : 23657 Age : 55 Localisation : Tennessee Registration date : 2007-01-30
| Subject: Re: Taking the "poetic" out of songs Thu Jun 16, 2016 11:16 am | |
| I have a riff for the "Chick Flick" song already working. LOL
V1: I know you like to cuddle Hop on the couch with me I'll turn the lights down low And I'll turn on my tv I think I'll watch the "X-men" That's how I spend my nights You flip to "Gone With The Wind" That's when we started to fight!
Chorus: You know I love you, baby But right now you're making me sick I can put up with most anything But don't make me watch a chick flick
V2: You can hog all the blankets You can even take most of the bed You can wear my shirts Or even take the hat off my head You can go out with your girlfriends Or spend our very last dime But, baby, there is just one place Where I'm gonna have to draw the line
Chorus: You know I love you, baby But right now you're making me sick I can put up with most anything But don't make me watch a chick flick
Bridge: I don't want to be so mean or come of like some shnook But our relationship's over if you make me watch "The Notebook" _________________ I might have decided, or maybe not, that I should or shouldn't, depending on the issue or non-issue, to possibly share or not share, any thoughts, opinions, or facts (that might not be deemed factual by some), due to possible fear of any misinterpretation or retribution. https://christianhardmusic.niceboard.com/
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Staybrite
Number of posts : 23668 Age : 56 Localisation : Arizona Desert Registration date : 2007-02-08
| Subject: Re: Taking the "poetic" out of songs Thu Jun 16, 2016 2:27 pm | |
| The satirist is you is coming out! Sounds cool _________________ "I used to be indecisive.......... Now I'm not sure."
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Through The Dark Radio
Number of posts : 4330 Age : 54 Localisation : Pennsylvania Registration date : 2013-09-17
| Subject: Re: Taking the "poetic" out of songs Thu Jun 16, 2016 3:15 pm | |
| Now there's a word you don't see too often . . . "schnook" | |
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Xid
Number of posts : 5591 Age : 55 Localisation : Knoxville, TN Registration date : 2014-03-12
| Subject: Re: Taking the "poetic" out of songs Thu Jun 16, 2016 5:21 pm | |
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alldatndensum Admin
Number of posts : 23657 Age : 55 Localisation : Tennessee Registration date : 2007-01-30
| Subject: Re: Taking the "poetic" out of songs Fri Jun 17, 2016 8:25 am | |
| - Through The Dark Radio wrote:
- Now there's a word you don't see too often . . . "schnook"
I had to use a rhyming dictionary and then ran the word through Dictionary.com to make sure I was using it correctly. Its a legit word. _________________ I might have decided, or maybe not, that I should or shouldn't, depending on the issue or non-issue, to possibly share or not share, any thoughts, opinions, or facts (that might not be deemed factual by some), due to possible fear of any misinterpretation or retribution. https://christianhardmusic.niceboard.com/ | |
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alldatndensum Admin
Number of posts : 23657 Age : 55 Localisation : Tennessee Registration date : 2007-01-30
| Subject: Re: Taking the "poetic" out of songs Fri Jun 17, 2016 8:29 am | |
| - Staybrite wrote:
- The satirist is you is coming out! Sounds cool
Satire is just sarcasm with a longer attention span. I'm just writing whatever comes to me right now. I'd like to have a few more of my more tradional lyrical pieces to put to music, but this is what is coming. So, I may actually do that EP idea and just record the satire songs. That might work for an album name, too. "Satire Songs" or "Night Of The Living Satire". _________________ I might have decided, or maybe not, that I should or shouldn't, depending on the issue or non-issue, to possibly share or not share, any thoughts, opinions, or facts (that might not be deemed factual by some), due to possible fear of any misinterpretation or retribution. https://christianhardmusic.niceboard.com/ | |
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alldatndensum Admin
Number of posts : 23657 Age : 55 Localisation : Tennessee Registration date : 2007-01-30
| Subject: Re: Taking the "poetic" out of songs Sat Jun 18, 2016 9:42 pm | |
| I am still toying with the super glue song. I also have something in mind for a meme I saw on Facebook. It had a picture of a very spoiled looking cat saying, "As long as I get everything I want, then I'm totally flexible!" _________________ I might have decided, or maybe not, that I should or shouldn't, depending on the issue or non-issue, to possibly share or not share, any thoughts, opinions, or facts (that might not be deemed factual by some), due to possible fear of any misinterpretation or retribution. https://christianhardmusic.niceboard.com/ | |
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Guilty/Forgiven
Number of posts : 9986 Age : 55 Localisation : Yucca Valley, CA Registration date : 2007-05-18
| Subject: Re: Taking the "poetic" out of songs Sun Jun 19, 2016 1:39 pm | |
| Just to clarify, I don't have a problem with "song poetry" and the exaggerations that come with it... I just started this thread as a joke. To get a couple laughs out of changing the poetic parts back to reality - changing "I would climb the highest mountain for you" to "I would walk 3 blocks for your love"... just seems more realistic and makes me laugh. But no, this thread is not serious. | |
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alldatndensum Admin
Number of posts : 23657 Age : 55 Localisation : Tennessee Registration date : 2007-01-30
| Subject: Re: Taking the "poetic" out of songs Sun Jun 19, 2016 9:14 pm | |
| It isn't? You mean I wrote those other two songs for nothing? Now I will have to completely rethink my life goals. Wait--maybe I should set some first! _________________ I might have decided, or maybe not, that I should or shouldn't, depending on the issue or non-issue, to possibly share or not share, any thoughts, opinions, or facts (that might not be deemed factual by some), due to possible fear of any misinterpretation or retribution. https://christianhardmusic.niceboard.com/ | |
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Guilty/Forgiven
Number of posts : 9986 Age : 55 Localisation : Yucca Valley, CA Registration date : 2007-05-18
| Subject: Re: Taking the "poetic" out of songs Sun Jun 19, 2016 10:11 pm | |
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alldatndensum Admin
Number of posts : 23657 Age : 55 Localisation : Tennessee Registration date : 2007-01-30
| Subject: Re: Taking the "poetic" out of songs Mon Jun 20, 2016 11:33 am | |
| Anyone want to help with the "supergluing your mouth shut" idea?
How about the "as long as I get everything I want, I am totally flexible" idea?
I could also call the EP, if I do it, "The Satire Strikes Back". LOL _________________ I might have decided, or maybe not, that I should or shouldn't, depending on the issue or non-issue, to possibly share or not share, any thoughts, opinions, or facts (that might not be deemed factual by some), due to possible fear of any misinterpretation or retribution. https://christianhardmusic.niceboard.com/ | |
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Xid
Number of posts : 5591 Age : 55 Localisation : Knoxville, TN Registration date : 2014-03-12
| Subject: Re: Taking the "poetic" out of songs Mon Jun 20, 2016 12:31 pm | |
| I'd be happy to lend a hand! | |
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alldatndensum Admin
Number of posts : 23657 Age : 55 Localisation : Tennessee Registration date : 2007-01-30
| Subject: Re: Taking the "poetic" out of songs Mon Jun 20, 2016 2:00 pm | |
| What I need right now are phrases about people who are haughty and spoiled. I can work from there.
With the super glue story, I just need to keep making things up and "adding" to what really happened. _________________ I might have decided, or maybe not, that I should or shouldn't, depending on the issue or non-issue, to possibly share or not share, any thoughts, opinions, or facts (that might not be deemed factual by some), due to possible fear of any misinterpretation or retribution. https://christianhardmusic.niceboard.com/ | |
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Guilty/Forgiven
Number of posts : 9986 Age : 55 Localisation : Yucca Valley, CA Registration date : 2007-05-18
| Subject: Re: Taking the "poetic" out of songs Mon Jun 20, 2016 10:20 pm | |
| - alldatndensum wrote:
- What I need right now are phrases about people who are haughty and spoiled. I can work from there.
You could parody songs like that one that goes "Shouldn't I have this, shouldn't I have all of this and passionate kisses" Or that one about the person being so vain that they "probably think this song is about them" | |
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alldatndensum Admin
Number of posts : 23657 Age : 55 Localisation : Tennessee Registration date : 2007-01-30
| Subject: Re: Taking the "poetic" out of songs Tue Jun 21, 2016 9:02 am | |
| I don't even know which songs you are referring to, Jim.
I'd like to keep these as original as possible. _________________ I might have decided, or maybe not, that I should or shouldn't, depending on the issue or non-issue, to possibly share or not share, any thoughts, opinions, or facts (that might not be deemed factual by some), due to possible fear of any misinterpretation or retribution. https://christianhardmusic.niceboard.com/ | |
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Xid
Number of posts : 5591 Age : 55 Localisation : Knoxville, TN Registration date : 2014-03-12
| Subject: Re: Taking the "poetic" out of songs Tue Jun 21, 2016 10:27 am | |
| - Guilty/Forgiven wrote:
- Or that one about the person being so vain that they
"probably think this song is about them" Your So Vain - Carly Simon | |
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alldatndensum Admin
Number of posts : 23657 Age : 55 Localisation : Tennessee Registration date : 2007-01-30
| Subject: Re: Taking the "poetic" out of songs Tue Jun 21, 2016 10:36 am | |
| I never liked Carly Simon. Apologetix even did a rendition of that song and I don't like it, either. I have their newest MP3s of the new CD coming and don't like it at all. _________________ I might have decided, or maybe not, that I should or shouldn't, depending on the issue or non-issue, to possibly share or not share, any thoughts, opinions, or facts (that might not be deemed factual by some), due to possible fear of any misinterpretation or retribution. https://christianhardmusic.niceboard.com/ | |
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alldatndensum Admin
Number of posts : 23657 Age : 55 Localisation : Tennessee Registration date : 2007-01-30
| Subject: Re: Taking the "poetic" out of songs Tue Jun 21, 2016 1:31 pm | |
| Tell me what you think :
COMPLETELY FLEXIBLE
V1. Some folks think that I'm spoiled rotten I just have eccentric needs I only want whatever I see I wouldn't call that greed I don't expect anyone to worship me Simple praise and gifts are great I'd hate to tell you how awesome I am But I feel that I should educate!
Chorus: You may think that I'm a little brash Or totally detestable But as long as I get everything I want, I'm completely flexible
V2: I don't feel that I am all puffed up I'm really quite humble, you see It hurts when I'm called egotistical 'Cause there is no one better than me Just keep your opinions to yourself Because I am always right So excuse me if I keep repeating myself If its true, then you can't call it trite
There a couple of lines that need tweaking on this. The chorus came first and doesn't quite fit the feel of the verses. I am open to suggestions. _________________ I might have decided, or maybe not, that I should or shouldn't, depending on the issue or non-issue, to possibly share or not share, any thoughts, opinions, or facts (that might not be deemed factual by some), due to possible fear of any misinterpretation or retribution. https://christianhardmusic.niceboard.com/
Last edited by alldatndensum on Tue Jun 21, 2016 10:26 pm; edited 1 time in total (Reason for editing : Fixing spelling errors in the lyrics) | |
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alldatndensum Admin
Number of posts : 23657 Age : 55 Localisation : Tennessee Registration date : 2007-01-30
| Subject: Re: Taking the "poetic" out of songs Tue Jun 21, 2016 1:55 pm | |
| Made a couple adjustments to the lyrics above. It flows better and takes care of some repetitve phrases. _________________ I might have decided, or maybe not, that I should or shouldn't, depending on the issue or non-issue, to possibly share or not share, any thoughts, opinions, or facts (that might not be deemed factual by some), due to possible fear of any misinterpretation or retribution. https://christianhardmusic.niceboard.com/ | |
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Staybrite
Number of posts : 23668 Age : 56 Localisation : Arizona Desert Registration date : 2007-02-08
| Subject: Re: Taking the "poetic" out of songs Tue Jun 21, 2016 2:53 pm | |
| - Xid wrote:
- Guilty/Forgiven wrote:
- Or that one about the person being so vain that they
"probably think this song is about them" Your So Vain - Carly Simon Every time I hear that song I think of my old college buddy Darrel Frame...we used to sing that part as "You're so Frame, I bet you think this song is about you". Of course he wanted to use the Scorpions classic as his theme song....you know the one "Here I am, rock you like a Darrel Frame" Ahhh, good times. _________________ "I used to be indecisive.......... Now I'm not sure."
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messiaen77
Number of posts : 2152 Age : 53 Localisation : in a yellow submarine Registration date : 2011-08-23
| Subject: Re: Taking the "poetic" out of songs Wed Jun 22, 2016 9:39 pm | |
| See, I thought you were talking about "I Would Do Anything For Love" Meat Loaf, not the tasty meaty meal. | |
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